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国外优秀文书选摘:乐高的故事

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关于美本申请文书写作康奈尔大学招生办主任Andrew K. Strickler在官方网站上分享如下建议

1. 预留大量时间撰写文书。千万别等到最后时刻才动笔。这条建议听上去简单得离谱但是确实能让你在安心写作的时候取得截然不同的效果

2. 选择跟你想写的故事最为贴切的文书题目。文书题目是为你思考对你来说最为重要的事情而提供启发和方向。你填满申请表格的信息从不同维度呈现你的能力,但是只有文书让你用自己的声音讲述对于自己来说最为重要的事情。选择你关心的事情,它会更自然地在文书中流淌出来。

(a) 误解:没有经历过改变人生的大事就不足以写文书。其实,每个人都有对于自己来说最为重要的事情,请拿给我们看看它为什么对你如此重要。

(b) 误解如果没有重的国际服务经历就写不好文书。其实,如果有的话,也得是对你的成长来说很重要才写;如果没有的话,就选择去写对你来说更加重要的经历就可以。

3. 写完初稿先沉淀一段时间等过些日子再回头看看。也可以请信任的老师(笔者注:鉴于各国本科申请文化差别较大,建议美国老师为宜)给以反馈,但也别受他人意见左右。你自己的故事,或者小却重要的段落,都是你自己的叙事声音或者思考方式。

4. 注意在修改后要小心校对。文档中的拼写检查功能不是最为可靠的朋友。我自己有时候匆匆写完一封电邮,也会后悔没有在发出以前先检查几遍。

5. 递交申请文书以后好好犒劳一下自己看看电影跑跑步遛遛狗或者想做什么就做什么吧

 

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官方范文摘选

 

Building My Reality

Matthew

At this point in my life, I am used to the chuckles I receive upon telling my friends that I, in fact, love Legos. Growing up in a house of four children was a hectic environment to say the least; an escape from the chaos of siblings was much needed. As a kid, sitting down and concentrating on one task was never my intention, rather I was constantly energetic, chasing and being chased by my siblings.

Building Lego sets had always been a way to minimize any stressors that were going on at the time, or to simply relax and enjoy the challenge. My first Lego set was given to me at a very young age, my seventh birthday, and although excited, I was puzzled with what I was supposed to accomplish. I knew that Luke Skywalker was going to need a little more assistance than I could offer at that age, so after countless hours of struggling and persisting, I inevitably succumbed to the numerous offers of help. Each birthday and holiday moving forward, I requested Legos in order to perfect my ability, and each time I gained expertise. Finally, I encountered my own “Eureka!” moment, individually completing my first kit, a miniature replica of the Seattle Space Needle, solely on willpower and sheer excitement.

My worn, but comfortable bedroom floor had become my safe haven for letting my mind wander and to create sculptures I would have never thought of if it hadn’t been for my obsession with those miniscule, plastic blocks. I hadn’t usually been the most creative, artistic person; however, when I sat down in my room next to my collection and freed my mind, I suddenly become an artist of my own definition. Soon, as I got older, more unique ideas for pieces flooded my mind rather than following strict instructions. These ideas had resulted in the possibility of designing and constructing certain buildings and entities, of course without any real-world consequences. My bedroom floor eventually turned into a skyline resembling that of New York City, skyscrapers grazing the top of my bed and Rockefeller Center spanning from my desk to my closet. Arriving home late from school or a strenuous practice, I was relieved to lay down next to my meaningful, personalized city.

I rarely construct Lego structures nowadays; however, my obsession with those tiny bricks embedded a passion in me that will never cease to follow me. Arriving to a boarding school as a first-year student, I was extremely hesitant and nervous. Though I would soon be a part of a team, I sought an escape from my anxiety of being away from home and especially my bedroom. Though I hadn’t brought along any of my Legos, (I’m sure you can imagine why), I signed up for a new class which taught the basics of ceramics and sculpting figures. Ceramics was an entire new entity to me and I enjoyed every second of it. I had been constructing simple bowls and plates to ease myself into the new medium I was using. Soon, however, I became more confident and adventurous with my designs. After hours in the studio at school, I ultimately transferred my projects back to my personal studio, my bedroom, to join the company of my surrounding Lego projects. Not only providing me with entertainment, Legos left an everlasting mark on my capacity to experiment with new endeavors I would rarely attempt.

Legos hold a special place in my mind and my heart due to the effect they have had on my curiosity, creativity and overall optimism. I will continue to design my sculptures, my essays, and my future, which is certainly guided by my imagination. Having constructed those guided, age appropriate sets and eventually designing unique pieces, I developed a knack for sculpting and imagining brand new ideas I transfer into my everyday life.

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